Talk:Episode 2/Plot/@comment-109.115.211.197-20131002112753

Okay for journal (however we can call it newspaper, that's not wrong). Perhaps I wrote 'aboit' and not 'about' but deny and refuse have the same meaning. The punctuation is totally wrong and I corrected it. Italic textThere are lots of repetitions with the verb 'tell'. Maybe I'm not perfect but your text is full of errors too and in some points I couldn't be able to read it. Believe me, I have grammar lessons every day in various languages (English, Italian, German, Latin, Russian, Japanese) so I know where to put a comma or a full stop. Your errors: its: it's end: ends decide: decides Also, I used synonyms because you repeated lots of words and it's not good. Sorry if I've been rough but it's my way of thinking.